Please check my composition. Thanks

Please check my composition. Thanks

what is your opinion about the quotation: There are many things worth living for, there are a few things worth dying for, but there is nothing worth killing for".(-Tom Robbins My composition which I wrote about it: I frequently wrestle with the question what I'm doing here, what is the purpose of all I'm going through. I found that every life is lived for something. Some people live for possessions. The desire to acquire overwhelms them. Other people live for finding their true love. There is no meaning to life without love. Getting married is one of the most significant events in our life. Making your dream come true is also a good reason for living for. Life offers us pleasures and entertainments which provide joy and happiness to our life. On the contrary, there are a few things worth dying for. I think, honestlt, that there aren't too many reasons for dying for something. I suggest that all people in the world will agree to defend their country from enemies or attacks even if it risks their life. There is a meaning for your death Finally, my view of killing is that there is nothing worth killing for. What we have here we have to make the best of and get on with life. The only way to get around things is to talk. Talking each other is the best way to solve problems instead killing which doesn't have a positive light
 

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I frequently wrestle with the question what am I doing here, what is the purpose of all I'm going through. I found that every life is lived for something. Some people live for possessions. The desire to acquire overwhelms them. Other people live for finding their true love. There is no meaning to life without love. Getting married is one of the most significant events in our lives. Making your dreams come true is also a good reason for living. Life offers us pleasure and entertainment which provides joy and happiness to our lives. On the contrary, there are a few things worth dying for. I think, honestly, that there aren't too many things worth dying for. I suggest that all of the people in the world will agree to defend their country from enemies or attacks even if it can risk their lives. There is a meaning to this death. To sum things up, my view of killing is that there is nothing worth killing for. We have to make the best of what we have here and get on with our lives. The only way to get around things is to talk. Talking with each other is the best way to solve problems instead of killing which doesn't have a positive light.​
 

רונני2001

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תיקונים...

שיניתי הרבה דברים מסורבלים. היו כאן טעויות מכל מיני סוגים. אחת הטעויות היו במשפטים "מעוברתים" (מהמילה עברית)... משפטים שנשמעים טוב בעברית ולא ניתן להמירם לאנגלית בצורה ישירה אלה הם צריכים לעבור שינוי בניסוח המשפט.
*What is your opinion about the *following quotation: *“There are many things worth living for, there are a few things worth dying for, but there is nothing worth killing for" (Tom Robbins). *The following is a composition about my opinion: I frequently wrestle with the question: *“What am I doing here?” *“What is the purpose of all that I'm going through?” *I realized that everybody has a purpose in life. Some people live for *material things. The desire to acquire overwhelms them. Other people live for finding their true love. There is no meaning to life without love. Getting married is one of the most significant events in our *lives. Making your *dreams come true is also a good reason for living (בלי להוסיף שוב for). Life offers us pleasures and entertainments, which provide joy and happiness to our *lives. (*On the contrary* = לא שימוש נכון במשפט הזה), there are a few things worth dying for. I *honestly think that there aren't *many reasons *worth dying for. I *believe that all people in the world *would agree to defend their country from enemies or attacks even if it risks their *lives. *Your life has a meaning. Finally, my view *about killing is that there is nothing worth killing for. (מסורבל= -What we have here we have to make the best of and get on with our *lives-). The only way to (get around=לא שימוש נכון) *solve things is to talk (… *about things that bother you). Talking (תוריד את each other) is the best way to solve problems instead *of killing which doesn't have a positive *side.​
 
תודה לך....אבל מה לא נכון במשפט...

I found that every life is lived for something? ומה הבעיה ב-Some people live for possessions?
 

רונני2001

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תשובות...

שני המשפטים האלה תקינים לחלוטין באנגלית (מבחינת הדיקדוק). רק ש... הם ממש לא נשמעים טבעיים באנגלית. בעברית זה הולך אחרת, באנגלית - מרגישים מן טעם לוואי כזה מהמשפטים. אדם ששפת האם שלו היא אנגלית יזהה מיד את כל ה"טעויות".
 

רונני2001

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עוד תיקונון...

I realized = I have realized או I have come to realize ניתן גם להשתמש ב- Present Simple כאן: "I realize"
 
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