Check it please

Crazy Girl2000

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I wrote a song And I want you to check the grammer Thank in advance Sit,eat, go to sleep! I dont like it,get rid of this! If you want I'll help you but I want you to pay But you don't understand Im just a kid I can't do everything you need So It's true sometimes I was bad and its true that what I wont I get But all I want to say Im not an object that you can control And make him pain Im sick of you Im going away And this is all what I have to say You can't control me anymore And this life Just feel like a war Im sick of you Im going away This is all I want to say I know Im over-doing I know you think Im puffing it I know that you love me And I love you But I can't be who you want And I can't be controlled And I can't live the way you do So just for the record I dont hate you And I dont wanna a fight But Im sick of - You.
 
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"And this life Just feel like a war" - And this life just feels like war. "And I dont wanna a fight" - And I don't wanna fight
 
עזבי דקדוק בשיר..

בשירים לא מקפידים על דקדוק - אם את רוצה לדעת אם יש לך טעויות אצביע על אחד מאוד בולט:And this is all what I have to say צריך להיות: And this is all THAT I have to say זהו
 
../images/Emo15.gif אפשר גם בלי כלום

כאילו בשימוש בRelative pronouns, ניתן פשוט לא לשים את המילה "And this is all I have to say" ובקשר למה שתיקנת, אפשר גם וגם.
 
ובקשר למה שתיקנת, אפשר גם וגם. -huh

טעות לכותב: all what i have to say. והסיבה היחידה שהערתי על כך היא שזה הטעות היחידה שמסגירה שהכותב הוא לא דובר אנגלית.
 
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