עזרה בשיפור קטע
שלום לכולם אני צריך להגיש מחר בוק ריפורט אנא עזרו לי לתקן שגיות כתיב והגייה ולשפר את הקטע לרמה של תלמיד בכיתה ז': The story is about a young archeology named Daniel Jackson that has a theory that the Khufu's pyramid wasn't build by the Egyptians ever one didn’t agres with this theory ' after that a women from the military came to offer him a job the fined the solution to the stare gate Daniel agree and found the solution it turns out that he open a star gate he and he prepear to travel throw it with Catherine langford (the women how offered the job to Daniel) and 3 soldier and 1 commander named O'Neil I 6 am they went throw the staregate and found them self in the Khufu's pyramid Daniel and his team staretat waking anthill they found a city full of people whent the see the key that Daniel to the star gate that Daniel has on his neck they blence him and they take him and his team to a palace and being him a beautiful women and dinael gets in love the women shows denial werw he can found the stare gate he goes to the pyramid and founds Ra the king of the sun Daniel fights Ra and keild him then he showed his team the stargate and tell theam that he is planning to stay with the woman he meet they say etch adder good bay and the wallk to the stare gate The end! The has a lot of more letel storyes and it's very interesting
שלום לכולם אני צריך להגיש מחר בוק ריפורט אנא עזרו לי לתקן שגיות כתיב והגייה ולשפר את הקטע לרמה של תלמיד בכיתה ז': The story is about a young archeology named Daniel Jackson that has a theory that the Khufu's pyramid wasn't build by the Egyptians ever one didn’t agres with this theory ' after that a women from the military came to offer him a job the fined the solution to the stare gate Daniel agree and found the solution it turns out that he open a star gate he and he prepear to travel throw it with Catherine langford (the women how offered the job to Daniel) and 3 soldier and 1 commander named O'Neil I 6 am they went throw the staregate and found them self in the Khufu's pyramid Daniel and his team staretat waking anthill they found a city full of people whent the see the key that Daniel to the star gate that Daniel has on his neck they blence him and they take him and his team to a palace and being him a beautiful women and dinael gets in love the women shows denial werw he can found the stare gate he goes to the pyramid and founds Ra the king of the sun Daniel fights Ra and keild him then he showed his team the stargate and tell theam that he is planning to stay with the woman he meet they say etch adder good bay and the wallk to the stare gate The end! The has a lot of more letel storyes and it's very interesting