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יש לי שאלה

אני אציק לכם בהמשך השבוע על כמה שאלות באנגלית אז בבקשה סובלנות: קודם אני צריך לכתוב חיבור של 140 מילים, איך להתחיל את החיבור איך להתמקד ועם מה לסיים, כאילו מה המבנה של החיבור! יש לי הרבה חיבורים: אז אני אשמח אם תדגימו לי בחיבור אחד למען שאני אצליח בשאר נושא החיבור שלי הוא you have just read about rescue workers - both male and famele. do you thing that there are any jobs that should be open onky to men or to women? which jobs? write a composition expressing and explaining your ideas and opinion! תודה לכל מי שעוזר!

 

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ניסיתי לכתוב משהו אשמח אם תתקנו

אותי, או תוסיפו ותעירו... תודה! החיבור מתיחס לאותה שאלה בקישור! When we talk about work, sure that there are a works just men or just women be able to do. When we are talking about men: the characteristics of men are: a physical power, courage and decisiveness in a dire emergencies. When the condition need to enter in the flames to rescue a child just a man can do it, because the women is emotional and not courage to that. Men can enter and save the child because the men are inferior emotional. When we are talking about to extrication corpse, I think that women can’t be able to do that like men, sure when we talk about women and men the intention is not to all of them. When we are talking about women: the characteristics of women are: psychology treatment, patience and to appeasing the people in a shock. The women can to speaking to the people in shock and appeasing them. They are more patience than the men and more touchy and amicable. An example: in the Israeli army just the men servant in very combats sections and campaign action because this type of the work need men, because they are more powerful and brave. תודה לכל מי שעוזר!

 

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תיקון/הערות

ראשית - עקרונית, לא עושים פה שיעורי בית עבור אנשים אחרים. אני עושה לך טובה כי משעמם לי. שנית - תיקוניי להלן.

With such a large range of jobs in the modern world, different jobs each require different skills and capacities from the individuals who carry them out. In light of the inherent differences between men and women, when we talk about work, I think that there are definitely jobs only men or only women are able to do, with some exceptions. When we are talking about men, the characteristics of men are: physical power, courage and decisiveness in a dire emergencies. When the situation demands entering in the flames to rescue a child, only a man could do this, because women are emotional and not courageous enough to do it. By contrast, men can enter and save the child because men are inferior emotionally. When we are talking about handling corpses, I think that women could handle that like men could. When we are talking about women, the characteristics of women are: a good understanding of emotions (required, for example, when giving psychological treatment), patience and an ability to appease people in shock. They are more patient than men, and touchier and more amicable. For example, in the Israeli army only men serve in combat roles, because this type of the work requires men, because they are more powerful and brave. In conclusion, with such obvious differences between men and women, one wonders: How is it that there are male psychologists and female surgeons?​

שלישית, הערות. תיקנתי לך את שגיאות הדקדוק והאיות. גם הוספתי קצת בפסקת הפתיחה. חסרה פסקת סיום, אז המצאתי אחת, אבל היא די סרקאסטית, שכן אני לא מסכים עם אפילו מילה אחת מהחיבור שלך

... ייתכן שתרצה לשנות אותה. אתה יודע כבר 3/4 ממבנה החיבור. יש פתיחה, גוף (במקרה הזה, עבודות המתאימות לגברים ועבודות המתאיות לנשים) וסיום. שאלות?

 

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