בדיקה של חיבורון
כתבתי 100 מילים כהמשך לסיפור "על עכברים ועל אנשים" מאת ג'ון סטינבק, אשמח אם תקראו ותתקנו (במידה ויש מה לתקן), אקבל בשמחה גם תיקונים רעיוניים ולא רק דקדוקיים. Slim, George, Curely and Carlson kept walking until they got to a bar. George was still depressed because he killed his old friend, Lennie. Slim tried to cheer him up: 'He was a hazard to society. He started with killing animals and moved to kill people…' George nodded but he was still upset. Everyone was happy and cheerful until they noticed George was gone. They went to look for him and found him dead in the bathroom, after he shot himself in the mouth. George couldn't bear the thought he is a murderer so he committed suicide. תודה מראש לעונים, רן.
כתבתי 100 מילים כהמשך לסיפור "על עכברים ועל אנשים" מאת ג'ון סטינבק, אשמח אם תקראו ותתקנו (במידה ויש מה לתקן), אקבל בשמחה גם תיקונים רעיוניים ולא רק דקדוקיים. Slim, George, Curely and Carlson kept walking until they got to a bar. George was still depressed because he killed his old friend, Lennie. Slim tried to cheer him up: 'He was a hazard to society. He started with killing animals and moved to kill people…' George nodded but he was still upset. Everyone was happy and cheerful until they noticed George was gone. They went to look for him and found him dead in the bathroom, after he shot himself in the mouth. George couldn't bear the thought he is a murderer so he committed suicide. תודה מראש לעונים, רן.
