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0rin

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../images/Emo210.gifpeople can you help me with

my self-description? it's for tomorrow and my teacher going to take it for check.. Self-description: The oval-faced fix me in a certainly way. I'm a natural leader, dedicated and don't give up before I achieve my goals. I'm always there for my friends, family or people who need my help. I might belong though as a snobbish person, but people who know me for real, know that I'm not at all this type. My friend's thing that I can do anything because of my positive quality, but it isn't always a true. For example: there are situation that I'm hiding the fact that I'm a shy girl and people around me don't see it. Because I'm a natural leader I feel that I need to be the one and that no one destroy it to me, additional as one as achieve her goals and often get them it's make me feel really good and because I'm working for one cause I'm dedicated. Although oval-faced fit the professions: medicine and diplomacy I'm turn to creative profession. With this profession I'll be able to show myself in the best way. about this line: "My friend's thing that I can do anything because of my positive quality...." I'm not sure if 'can' really fit (the same about 'because of'.) Thanks you guys!!​
 

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The oval-faced fix me in a certainly way (I DON'T UNDERSTAND WHAT YOU'RE TRYING TO SAY). I'm a natural leader. I'M dedicated and I don't give up before I achieve my goals. I'm always there for my friends, family or people who need my help. I might BE PERCEIVED as a snobbish person (SIMPLY "A SNOB" IS BETTER), but people who REALLY know me know that I'm not at all THE/THAT type (BETTER - "LIKE THAT"). My friends (NO ' BEFORE S) THINK that I can do anything because of my positive PERSONALITY, but it isn't always true. For example: there are TIMES WHEN I HIDE the fact that I'm a shy girl and people around me don't see it. Because I'm a natural leader I feel that I need to be the one (THE ONE TO WHAT?) and that no one SHOULD destroy it FOR me, additional as (????) SOMEone WHO achieveS her goals and often get them (GET WHAT?) it makeS me feel really good (WHAT DOES? THE SENTENCE DOESN'T MAKE SENSE) and because I'm working for one cause I'm dedicated (I DON'T UNDERSTAND WHAT YOU WERE TRYING TO SAY). Although AN oval face fitS the professions (NOT QUITE THE RIGHT PHRASING): medicine and diplomacy, I'm turn to (?? YOU MEAN YOU WANT TO CHOOSE A CREATIVE PROFESSION?) creative profession. IN this profession (CREATIVITY IS NOT A PROFESSION, YOU NEED TO BE SPECIFIC) I'll be able to show myself in the best way.
 

0rin

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../images/Emo210.gifOK thanks

Thanks but it doesn't matter now cause I've already wrote with my own correction and I gave it to my teacher… and she'll correct it. Again, thanks anyway!! LOL I'm not sure if: cause I've already wrote or because I've already written
 
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