essay- please fix my mistake

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essay- please fix my mistake

You can not get It if you really want . In my opinion, the sentence " where there is a will there is a way" is a false sentence. People can not achieve all that they want. For example, most of the students can not achieve 750 mark on the psychometric exam no matter how much they study for this exam. In fact, only percentage of tested in every term achieve this mark. Therefore, only a few people will able to study in faculty of medicine (at least in Israel's universities) . Another example , most of people never able to achieve to the Olympic games, no matter how they exercise in the gym, swim or run. In both case you must barn with the correct genes. In summary, you can not achieve all that you want. Succeed in my opinion, is hereditary . you may say that my position is pessimistic but this is our world..

 

[Nimst]

corrections

You can not get It if you really want (I'D CHANGE IT TO - "YOU CAN'T ALWAYS GET IT EVEN IF YOU REALLY WANT IT." OR AT LEAST ADD AN "EVEN" BEFORE THE "IF" IN YOUR OWN SENTENCE) . In my opinion, the sentence " where there is a will there is a way" is a false sentence (JUST "IS FALSE" IS ENOUGH). People can not achieve all that they want. For example, most of the students can not achieve A 750 mark on the psychometric exam no matter how much they study for this exam. In fact, only A CERTAIN percent of THOSE tested in EACH term (WHAT DO YOU MEAN BY TERM?) achieve this mark. Therefore, only a few people will able to study in THE faculty of medicine (at least in Israel's universities) . Another example IS THAT most people WILL never BE able to PARTICIPATE IN the Olympic games, no matter how HARD they exercise in the gym, swim or run. In both caseS you must BE BORN with the correct genes. In summary, you can not achieve all that you want. SucceSS, in my opinion, is hereditary. you may say that my position is pessimistic, but this is our world..​

 

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1. you can get it if you really want is a song from the movie "hitch" and I used it ironiclly 2. "term"- i meand that there are 6 time in every years the psycomestic test exist and in every "term" " only a certain percent of those tasted achieve a 750 mark but in secod tought this is reducant I needed to write only " In fact only one percent of those tested achieve this mark..

 

[Nimst]

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essay 2-letter-please fix

For the minister of education In the last week , I rode an article that is deal with the opinion that the matriculation tests often do not measure a person's true intelligence or ability and it make me to grin. This is no secret that the matriculation exam do not real measure ability or something else. They only measure the number of the hours that you sat and studies for the exam . In my opinion, education system should introduce some alternative methods instead of taking exam like present project and orally exam. This may give another aspect on the students' ability or intelligence. In addition, there are students that have learning disability like ADD and Dyslexia and therefore they have some difficulty to learn to exam and succeed on them will able to improve them final mark in the document thank for the alternative methods. Please giving to the student alternative!

 

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rode=read

 

[Nimst]

corrections

TO the minister of education Last week , I READ an article that dealS with the opinion that the matriculation EXAMS often do not measure a person's true intelligence or ability and it makeS me grin. IT is no secret that the matriculation examS do not realLY measure ability or something else (WHAT?). They only measure the number of hours that you sat and studieD for the exam . In my opinion, THE education system should introduce some alternative methods instead of taking examS, SUCH AS presentING projectS and TAKING oral examS. This may REVEAL another aspect OF the students' ability or intelligence. In addition, there are students that have learning disabilitIES like ADD and Dyslexia and therefore they have some difficulty IN learnING FOR examS and succeedING on them. THEY will BE able to improve theIR final mark ON the EXAM thankS TO theSE alternative methods. Please givE the studentS alternativeS!​

 

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I means

IT is no secret that the matriculation examS do not really measure learning abilities It is correct???

 

[Nimst]

yes

Just drop the "or something else" part.