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eliran9080

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book report

I need your help.... I need to write book report I wrote it, but I do not sure that this is right shall you please check this book report? This is help me a lot. Thank you.. Eliran
 

eliran9080

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Chemical Company/Tim Vicary Book report- The plot The plot: the story have begun when Mr. Duncan try to get a job to the chemical company. The chemical company wanted Mr. Duncan because he is biologist and they need biologist to make sure that everything in the factory is safe. In the meeting, there are three people, the people in the meeting are: Mr. Duncan (John), David Wilson and Mary carter. David Wilson was a young man which wore expensive black suit, he had a big gold ring on one finger. Mary Carter, she was older then David Wilson, she had short brown hair and friendly face. She was wearing a white coat with a lot of pens in the top pocket. Mr. Duncan got the job in the chemical company and his fee is very high. John Duncan told to his daughter and his son about the new job. His son name Andrew, he was thirteen years old. His daughter name Christine, she was sixteen years old. They went to the table to eat supper, in the supper, John remembered that his wife had been a good cook, his wife was be famous sailor, Rachel Horsley. John Duncan started work and Mary carter showed him round the factory. John was a very busy man now. All the day he looked for a new house, a big house for his family. He fined a house that he liked, so he decided to buy it. A few months later, John invited Mary to a meal in the new house, she agreed to the order. John was being very happy. After a week, John has finished the report about the chemical company. Mr. Wilson was be angry about the report so, he invited Simon and Simon's parents to the support.in the supper, John get impression from Simon and Simon's parents,so, he agree that that get married. Christine and Simon get married on a fine day in June. After a two days, they sailrd in a boat near the river, Simon look to another side suddenly, someone was shout "the girl, she's drowning" sp, Simon jumped to the river, he started swim hardly to catch her. He succeeded but she drank a lot of water from the river. The public enquiry came and the enquirer asked John questions about the chemical company. In the first, John wasn't tell the truth but, he was broke, and he discovered the truth, so this is cause to the company close. Many people in the town rest without work and also John stay without a work so, he needed to move to small house. This is the end of the story. thank you
 

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Chemical Company/Tim Vicary Book report- The plot The plot: The story BEGINS when Mr. Duncan TRIES to get a job IN the chemical company. Mr. Duncan because he is biologist and the CHEMICAL COMPANY needs A biologist to VERIFY that everything in the factory is safe. In the meeting ( WHAT MEETING?), there are three people: Mr JOHN. Duncan, David Wilson and Mary Carter. David Wilson IS a young man THAT WORE (TO THE MEETING?) AN expensive black suit AND a big gold ring on one finger.Mary Carter, older then David Wilson, haS A short brown hair and friendly face. She was wearing a white coat with a lot of pens in the top pocket. Mr. Duncan got the job in the chemical company and his SALARY is very high. John Duncan tELLS his daughter and his son about the new job. His son’S name IS Andrew, AND he IS thirteen years old. HIS sixteen years old daughter’S name IS Christine. They went to the table to eat supper, in the supper, John remembered that his wife WAS a good cook. His wife, Rachel Horsley, was A famous sailor. John Duncan startS workING and Mary carter IS SHOWING him Around the factory. John ISs a very busy man now. All the TIME? he lookS for a new house, a big house for his family. He finDS a house that he likes AND he decidES to buy it. A few months later, John invitES Mary to a meal in the new house AND SHE ACCEPTS THE INVITATION. John IS very happy. A WEEK LATER, John finishES the report about the chemical company. Mr. Wilson IS angry about the report AND HE invited Simon and Simon's parents to the supper (WHAT SUPPER?). In the supper, John gets A GOOD impression OF Simon and HIS parents AND he agreeS TO LET CHRISTINE MARRY HIM. Christine and Simon get married on a fine day in June. After two days, WHILE they sail in a boat near the river, Simon lookS AWAY FROM CHRISTINE AND suddenly someone shouts, "the girl, she's drowning." Simon jumpS to the river, swimING QUICKLY to catch her. He succeeds, but CHRISTINE HAS drank a lot of water from the river. The public enquiry came and the enquirer asked John questions about the chemical company (UH, THIS SENTENCE IS VERY UNRELATED TO THE LAST ONE). AT first, John Is nOt tellING the truth, but EVENTUALLY HE IS GAVING UP and he TELLS the truth. This causES to the company TO close. Many people in the town ARE LEFT without work, INCLUDING John. FINALLY, JOHN moveS to small house. OK, WHEN YOU WRITE ABOUT A STORY, MAKE SURE YOU WRITE IT ALL IN PRESENT. (IF YOU WRITE SOMETHING ELSE, IT STILL MUST BE IN ONLY ONE “TIME PERIOD”. ) YOU HAD MANY GRAMMAR MISTAKE, WORK ON THAT.
SOME UNCLEAR STUFF, YOU SHOULD TRY CORRECTING IT.
 
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