i love trance music

[ilan0111]

i love trance music

well, how should i begin... i live in this god damn buliding, in central R.L. there, in the 3rd story, on the left corner, is my room. i have two big windows, and nothing is keeping the sun beams from entering it. i have a loud stereo set that in summer time, my upper neighbor is yearning to live this f place. she has this bizzar hobby of knocking on my door every evening, well almost. thanks god. besides, she's often replacing boyfriens. well, you're probably asking your selves how do i know it....i know it because i can see it from my windowsill, how's the cars changing. one comes with mazda the other with volvo...and it never ends...thus, i can't blame them. she's hot for sure. she's approximately 5ft 6. dark hair with a ravishing buttocks. Her mother revamped the shower and water had begun dripped to owr floor. shit, it was a mess. i went up, knocking furiously on her door. they hadn't answered me. And they have this ugly dog. when i come to think of it, i need to do barbeque next saturday....lol if u have any corrections, please do so, bye and love u all.

 

[ArieIO5]

?What's RL

Rishon LeZion? About your passage - the most noticable thing about it, even after no more than a brief glance, is that it needs to undergo some serious structural rearrangements. In other words, it is a mess. I don't know if this is something you're supposed to hand in, but if it is then I would strongly suggest you tidy it up before doing so. Start with capitalization. You have basically a good control of English grammar. There are some misuses here and there ("how the cars change" instead of "how's the cars changing", "water began dripping onto our floor"), bits of spelling mistakes lying around ("leave", "bizzare". etc.), but nothing that could, uh, get you in prison.​

 

[ilan0111]

i'm still learning

it's hard, these are the first passages i've ever written but thank u for your notices by the way, i know all this just by reading books. what i've been learned wasn't soffice i believe some they it'll go fluently bye and thank u very much