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Hello. I've a small writing assignment, and i'd like you to help me: Suddenly one day you wake up and the people around you begin to treat you as if you were invisible. write a letter to a friend to describe your feelings about the situation. This is what i wrote: Hi Jack, How are you? Have you ever felt invisible? Have you ever felt that no one want to speak with you? I feel like this about a week, and I must to speak with someone about that. I don't really know why nobody pays attention to me. Have I made something bad? Have I insulted someone? What people think when they treat me that way? I can't understand that. It's very hard to me. I feel that no one cares what I feel, and when I try to make a conversation with one of my friends – he just ignores me. Even worth – when I asked my mother go to shopping, there was no response. I think that only when people don’t speak or apply to you, you understand how important they for you. Try to imagine that situation – I think that no one could survive more that some weeks without any communication. 1. If there are some errors, I'll be glad if you'll fix them... 2. I need more ideas (or topics? what's the right word?) to write about. I'm really desperate - I need to hand in this assignment tomorrow and I don't know how continue... It's very important to me so please reply as soon as possible... Thank you!!!
 

Nimst

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good day to you too

Hi Jack, How are you? Have you ever felt invisible? Have you ever felt that no one wantS to speak with you? I HAVE FELT this WAY FOR about a week, and I must speak with someone about IT. I don't really know why nobody pays attention to me. Have I DONE something bad? Have I insulted someone? What DO people think when they treat me THIS way? I can't understand IT. It's very hard FOR me. I feel that no one cares what I feel, and when I try to START a conversation with one of my friends – he OR SHE just ignores me. Even WORSE – when I asked my mother TO go shopping, there was no response. I think that only when people don’t speak or PAY ATTENTION to you, you understand how important they ARE TO you. Try to imagine that situation – I think that no one could survive more that A FEW weeks without any communication.​
 

the html man

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Thank you very much!

Here's the final version (I just added one paragraph and made some fixes). Are there more mistakes? Hi Jack, How are you? Have you ever felt invisible? Have you ever felt that no one wants to speak with you? I have felt this way for a week, and I must speak with someone about it. I don't really know why nobody pays attention to me. Have I done something wrong? Have I insulted someone? What do people think when they treat me this way? I can't understand it, and it's very hard for me. I feel that no one cares what I feel, and when I try to start a conversation with one of my friends – he or she just ignores me. Even worse – when I asked my mother to go shopping, there was no response. I think that only when people don’t speak or pay attention to you, you understand how important they are for you. Try to imagine that situation – I think that no one could survive more that a few weeks without any communication. My conclusion about this situation is that until you don't lose something, you can't appreciate it. I could never think that a few days without talking can make you so sad and lonely, and I hope I will not be in this situation in the future. Again, Thank you!
 
I'm really really sorry but...

I must to print it in about a hour or 2 (בעוד שעה או שעתיים) so please if there are mistakes, please say. you don't must to write exactly where, just tell me and I'll find... I'm sorry if I'm impertinent but it's very important to me
Thanks
 

ArieIO5

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It's basically very well written and almost flawless, but still there are some mistakes, mainly in the last paragraph (the new one). One of them that I will point out is in the third-to-last line, where you wrote "until you don't lose", and I assume you meant to write "until you lose". There are a few others, but after all this is supposed to be handed in, and I want to leave some work for your teacher...​
 

Nimst

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hope you haven't printed it out yet...

My conclusion about this situation is that until you lose something, you can't appreciate it. I never WOULD HAVE THOUGHT that a few days without talking COULD make you so sad and lonely, and I hope not TO be in this situation in the future.
 
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